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Citing that jazz is extremely popular in
Monroe, the writer here tries to conclude that the new jazz club will be
tremendously profitable. However, this claim relies on a series of unproven
assumptions, thus is not persuasive as it stands. Rather, in order to evaluate
the claim more appropriately, the author should provide more data with regards
to the diverse critical questions about: why the nearest Jazz club is 65 miles
away, what the proportion of 100,000 attendance of the jazz festival look like,
and what Monroe residents’ spending patterns on jazz industry are.
First
of all, the author should answer the question about why the nearest jazz club
is far away even though jazz is, based on his claim, very popular in Monroe. If
jazz music is really popular in the city, there should be many jazz clubs in
downtown in Monroe. For example, in Chicago, one of the well known jazz hometowns
in the US, has more than 10 clubs in downtown where are almost full of visitors
every night. However, in Monroe, there is none in downtown. Perhaps the
popularity is not that high as the writer claims. Thus, the author should
analyze why the nearest club is far as well as why they do not have any clubs
in downtown yet to recheck the popularity issue.
In
addition to the number of clubs, the author should provide the exact proportion
of the 100,000 audience for the annual jazz festival in Monroe. Has the
majority of the ticket buyers come from Monroe? If, in the group of 100,000
people, there are more visitors coming from other cities rather than residents
in Monroe, the claim of that Monroe people love jazz will be scant. Therefore,
scrutinizing how many portion Monroe residents take out of the 100,000 audience
is essential to evaluate the claim.
Lastly,
even though the writer reports that nationwide survey said typical jazz fans
spend up to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment, this notion does not
necessarily guarantee that Monroe residents will spend the same amount of
money. In other words, the author should answer this question: is the
nationwide survey result applicable to Monroe? What is the Monroe residents’
spending habit or pattern with regards to entertaining? If they spend more
money to other entertainment, e.g., watching movies, the claim should not be
cogent enough to persuade readers. For this reason, the applicability of the
nationwide survey result on Monroe case should be studied with keen eyes.
In
sum, the author’s claim about that new jazz club in Monroe will be extremely
profitable is not persuasive because it is based on unreliable evidence. In
order to evaluate the claim better, the author should provide more data and
analysis with regards to diverse questionable aspects. These questions will
include, but are not limited to: why is the nearest jazz club far away? what is
the proportion of the 100,000 attendance exactly? and what is Monroe residents’
spending pattern on entertaining? With more answers to these questions, the
author can strengthen his claim more effectively. |