▶ Your Answer :
Citing the
phenomena of deceased shoppers and increased skateboarders, the author claimed
that the latter has attributed to the former; however, the correlation between
the two is not cogent enough to support the argument. In order to suffice the
argument, the author needs to answer the questions about (1) reasons for less
shoppers, (2) skateboarders shopping style, and (3) the total sales revenue,
not the numbers of shoppers.
First, the
author should clarify the correlation between the shopper numbers and
skateboarder numbers because shopper numbers can be influenced by other
factors. For example, perhaps the shoppers just moved out to other cities. Or
perhaps a brand new shopping center that attracts the shoppers better than
Central Plaza may open. We just do not know the reasons clearly based on the shown
statements. Thus, more concrete evidence should be presented to support the
assumption.
In addition to
this less effective correlation, the skateboarders shopping style also must be
scrutinized in terms of the plaza’s revenue. Since the skateboarders can be
customers for the plaza, more in-depth analysis on their shopping patterns
needs to be implemented. If the skateboarders shop more than the regular shoppers,
banning them will be a ridiculous decision. Therefore, the author must consider
this fact as well.
Lastly, even
assuming that the numbers of shoppers are lowering, the editor overlooks the
fact that what matters is the total revenue, not the number of shoppers. In
other words, low number does not mean less money. Low number of customers can
pay more money by purchasing expensive products, e.g., a Louis Vuitton purse, than
many customers who buy only affordable and everyday use goods such as toilet
papers, soap, or eggs. Determining this revenue oriented corroboration will
allow the argument to persuade more readers.
In sum, even
though the skateboarders increased dramatically that phenomenon may not
directly affect the decreased number of shoppers. In order to evaluate the argument
more appropriately, data about diverse questions that include the following,
but are not limited to, should be taken into account: why the shoppers do not
come, whether the skateboarders are customers, and how the revenue, not numbers
of customers, has been changed. |