▶ Your Answer :
The argument
that the "purported decline in deer populations is the result of the
deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the
frozen sea" seems tenable at first glance. If the author claims based on
clear evidence and assumptions which have clear support, the argument may
persuade readers of the argument. However, the author did not use specific
evidence to warrant his or her argument, and there needs to be more clear and
coherent statement in order to strengthen the argument.
First, the
author implicitly
refers that hunters are the trustworthy people that can say the decrease of
deer population is due to the global warming. However, the author must not
trust what the hunters mention about the decreasing number of deer. The author
needs resources and interviewers who have specific evidence about the number of
deer that decrease over years. Without statisticians or experts who can guarantee the fact, the author
cannot conclude that words from hunters are absolute true. In addition, the
hunters are the people who kill and hunt the deer. In other words, the number
of deer might declined
because the hunters might have killed many deer over many years. Again, in
order to strengthen the argument, the author needs experts and trustworthy
people regarding the number of deer and global warming.
Secondly, the
author claims that habitat of the deer must be long enough to sustain the
plants for survival, but at the same time must be cold enough to form frozen
sea. The statement seems to have flaw in that there are a few plants that
survive below zero Celsius.
In order to form frozen sea which is hard enough to cross the ocean for deer,
the
temperature may be lower than the zero Celsius. Thus, this
statement needs specific evidence about the habitat of the deer.
Third, the
author suggests that the number of deer declines because of the global warming,
enabling
them to follow the age-old migration patterns. However, there is no clear
evidence if the deer really move through the ice. Is it really true that deer
are decreasing due to not being able to move from ice to ice? Rather than that,
the deer might die out or extinct because of the water pollution, oil-spill accident, and not
proper refuse disposal. To
support the author's claim, there is a need of clear evidence that support
whether if the deer move from ice to ice.
Lastly, the
author uses the term "purported" when he or she mentions about the
decline in deer population. This makes readers confused. If the author is not
sure about the resources that she or he got, he or she must not warrant this
claim. In order to make strong argument, the author needs to have confidence
based on that support and proof that have good qualities.
In conclusion,
the statement that due to global warming, the deer population is decreasing
would not be necessarily wrong if the author claims based on sure evidence and
clear support. However, with the meager information that the author has given
to the readers, the author cannot persuade the readers. The author needs in-depth
research and discuss with experts in order to strengthen the
argument.
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