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In this article, the author claims that it they found new jazz music club in Monroe, it would be tremendously profitable. Seemingly, Even though this argument seems convincing, he is making a few logical errors and should correct them to make his assertion more persuasive.
First, it is unclear whether jazz music is extremely popular in the city of Monroe. The author says that 100,000 people attended to Monroe’s jazz festival last summer. However the scale of jazz festival is not compared with the jazz festivals held in the other regions, or the music festival with other genres. Thus it mislead that jazz festival is the most popular in Monroe city. Moreover, the author says that highest-rated radio program in Monroe is “jazz Nightly”. But it may comes not from the audiences’ preference, but from the favorable time zone. Because at weeknight, there would not be limited option for the audiences to listen the music program. Such an impact might be able to influence the highest rate of Jazz Nightly. Thus, it can not be determined as decisive information. In addition, even thoug a number of well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, if they do not perform in Monroe, and then, it does not relate to the popularity of jazz in this city. Therefore, the author’s argument does not seem to be proper to prove the popularity of jazz in Monroe.
Second, the author seems to neglect that all the jazz fans have distinctive ways to enjoy jazz music; attending live performance, listening to CD, performing music by themselves and so on.. Even though many people visit Monroe’s jazz festival, they might prefer listening to music performed live. Thus, it is unsure that people who attend jazz festival would come to jazz music club. Also, the author’s suggestion, “the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year” might not be related to the profit of jazz music club, because we have no idea how many people spend their money enjoying jazz music club. It seems too hasty to predict that jazz music club make high profits, based on such data. Therefore, the author need to offer more detailed statistic data on the jazz fans’ inclination and leanings.
In summary, the several evidence the author suggested is not substantial to explain the popularity of jazz in Monroe. To strengthen the claim, the writer should correct some evidence and add more solid information such as statistic data. |