Since many countries were industrialised, we have been living in busy society. Therefore, the number of both parents working house where both wife and husband are working, has increased and it is issued with regard to brought an issue regarding who should be in charge of nursing their children. I would like to talk about the proper answer for the question and what should be done to improve this situation.(상황을 improve한다는건 이 주제와 어울리지 않는 말입니다)
To begin with, we were educated in the past that a man in a family has to work to earn money for his family and a woman has to do housework and look after her children. Hence, people may take that for granted. However, the social status of women has risen, so a number of women are not able to bring up their children all the time.(여성의 지위가 올랐으니 아이들을 키우지 못한다는 말이 되지 않습니다. 그전에 전제 조건 넣어줘야 합니다. 이런곳에서 응집력 miss납니다) In this situation, some men assert that the sex of female is appropriate for caring for children.(뒷말과 뉘앙스 똑같습니다) In fact, scientists say that mother’s instinctive love is stronger than father’s. As a result, mothers are more closer to their children and mostly, are good at taking care of their children. Furthermore, children could learn a plenty of mother’s aptitude from their mother.
On the other hand, father’s instinctive love is also remarkable. Thus, fathers would be also be able to get close to their children. Moreover, assuming that a family is a small society, the comparison between the children staying only with a mother often and both of parents could be compelling.(comparison on what? 뭐에 대해 비교한다는건가요?) To put it another way, children could be taught learn a variety of social skills from a mother and father and it would be definitely beneficial for them.
To better this situation, the government, educational organisations and even campaigners should attempt to make people think what was wrong and how important it is for children that both a mother and father look after them. realize the positive effect that children can get when both mom and dad is looking after for them.
In conclusion, mothers and fathers should take responsible for the upbringing of children. In addition, the social communities should take concerted measures to change people’s stereotypes.