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One thing that clearly distinguishes modern
society from the last century is globalization. This world is rapidly becoming globalised global with well-developed transport and communication. With this phenomenon, people worry about its drawbacks such as destroying one's own culture and identity. I agree with the opinion above which that the cultural identity will
not be maintained maintain as now with in this phenomenon.
To begin with, since mass media and
transportation were invented, the speed of globalization has markedly increased.
Throughout the human history, the invention of ship, train, car and the
Internet have contributed to globalization most. People were able to run worldwide business with
ships and trains, and more and more people began to travel around of the world with
modern transport. transportations. What is more, with the Internet’s invention, people
started to communicate with others wherever they are locate, which has made it easy
for this world to become became global in advance. People know what is happening in every
part of the world with just one mobile device. 현재 상황에 대한 설명이 필요 이상으로 많습니다. 질문 내용은 요즘 글로벌화가 어떤 식으로 진행됐는지에 대한 것이 아니라 '글로벌화가 진행됨으로써 사람들이 문화적 정체성을 잃을 우려가 있다고 보는 것에 동의하는가?'이므로 문화적 정체성에 대한 내용을 중심으로 본론을 구성해주어야 합니다.
Despite all the development above, some
people worry about the matters it has brought and it will bring. This is
because globalization may exert a negative effect on traditions. To be
specific, since people started use a lot of imports from all around the world
and accept various kinds of cultures, the original cultures and custom which
have been kept from one’s ancient are being destroyed destroying and mixed mixing with other
cultures, which makes one’s tradition mess. According to a recent research,
small communities have problems caused by difficulties from travelers and visitors because more
and more young people leave to follow the new world since they have heard about
developed world. As it is, there are already some of news found as bad results
of globalization. 설명 내용들이 서로 연관성을 가지고 이어질 수 있도록 흐름을 구성해주세요. 수입품을 많이 쓰는 것과 고대부터 이어져온 문화가 망가지는 것이 어떤 관련성이 있는지 보여주려면 좀 더 구체적인 설명이 필요합니다. 사례 내용에서도 여행객과 방문자들로 인해 어려움을 겪는 것과 젊은이들이 빠져나가는 것은 아무런 연관성이 없기 때문에 문단 내용이 모호하게 느껴집니다. 어떤 요소를 globalization이 문화적 정체성에 미치는 부정적 영향이라고 제기할 것인지 1-2가지로 항목을 정하고 그 내용에만 초점을 두고 설명을 구체적으로 풀어주는 편이 좋을 것 같아요.
In conclusion, it is true that modern
society is transforming quickly with new developments. However, we should also
be afraid of losing our own tradition because of its negative effects. |