Today, computers have become becomes one of the most essential products in modern society. Some people have positive perspective about children`s computer using, However, the others are were worried about its downsides. It is a reality like having two the both sides of a coin, so in this essay, I will enumerate and discuss about both aspects.
First of all, using a computer everyday can have advantages upsides for children`s study. Majority of children are interested in computer and they try to search more and more information. This habit can be a good merit when they do their assignments. Moreover, computer skills are vital factor in the globalized world. Almost all public companies and social systems are based on computers. It This means, if youngsters learn how to use computers when they are young, they will have more opportunities to get a job or earn a fortune. or fortunes.
On the other hand, some people are worried about computer addiction, which is a lingering question. According to the survey, approximately 75% of children play do computer games more than 3 hours a day and even 17% of them have difficulty a difficult time in their study due to computer online computer games. Another significant problem is that a lot of young people have health a healthy problems because of too much computer use. For instead, young people prefer using computer to than playing outside. This sedentary life style generates children`s obesity, poor eyesight and other catastrophic side effects.
To sum up, children`s computer skills are is definitely essential for their school life and their future job. However, they should know how to use computer in a positive and appropriate way. In order to form good computer habits for make young people`s good computer habits, schools have to make proper curriculum about computer use, and also parents should encourage children`s regular exercise.
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