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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing in responese to your advertisement in a newspaper for a cook position in your Hotel.
This is why I send you this letter and herewith a copy of my resume for your interview.
During the past 8 years, I have worked in different types of restaurants, Such as Korean restaurant,
Chinese restaurant and a Japanese restaurant and especailly I cooked in a as Italian restaurant in Korea.
Furthermore, >> also 는 문두에 사용하지 못하는 단어입니다 I graduated from cooking college, studying western cuisine. Besides, I have cooking licenses of
like Korea,Japanese,Western and Chinese one. Once I achived this degree, I planned to transfer to University of Australia to complete the master course in Food Service Industry. Moreover, I have got band6 in IELTS. 아이엘츠 벤드 6 가 있어서 외국인과 영어로 소통할 수 있다 이런 내용이 추가되어야 할 듯 싶습니다
For 3years, I was a head chef in the Italian restaurants in Korea which is located in Kang-Nam Seoul,
the capital city. I strived personally, so I can think of there is no better the learning environment than working an organization as a chef in your hotel as one of the chefs. If it is possible to me, that I really want to work with Italian coworkers >> 가운데 - 빼주셔야 합니다.
I look forward to having the opportunity to further discuss my qualification with you
Sincerely yours,
Jamie.
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