Japan is known as a center of country in Asia. (a center of Asian countries). They have the greatest skills in a lot of fields such as technology, art and education. I really want to learn and know about them and be the person to not only help Japan but also the world in the future.(who can help Japan as well as the world in the future.) 일본과 세계를 돕는 사람이 되고 싶다 보다는 일본과 세계를 위해 일을 하고 싶다던지 공헌하고 싶다고 쓰는게 좋겠네요.
Mic is
anthe wonderful place where I can learn Enlgish and major one part in Englsih at the same time .(one of the major part in England at the same time.) (one of the major part for learning English at the same time.)
part를 어떤의미로 쓰신건지 모르겠지만. 2번째 뜻이라면 잘못 쓰신듯해요.
Moreover, I can learn Japanese as well. This is
what(why)I wanted the eduational circumstance if I can study (in)MIC, I will have big confidence to come ture my dream and I will do the best for the honor of MIC.I am the person who nerver(never) give up anything and run to achieve what I wanted(want). I have lived and studied like that
therefore,therefore는 문말에 쓰지 않아요. as long as I decide and plan to study in MIC , I will be the best student in MIC and studyhardly(hard) hardly는 거의 ~않다 라는 부사죠. in what I have wanted educational circumstance. in the educational circumstance that I have wanted 로 고쳐 봤는데요 what은 선행사를 포함한 관계 대명사라 뒤에 또 want의 목적어인 교육 환경이 오면 안되겠죠?