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Recently, the issue related to public health is being so hotly debated. that sSome experts are saying that the number of facilities for enjoying sports should be increased. Whereas,On the other hand, disagreeing with this idea due to the weak week relationship between them, some critics suggest other ways to improve public health. 질문이 요구하는 내용에는 '나의 의견'도 있으므로 두 입장뿐 아니라 나의 입장도 함께 소개해주어야 합니다.
Admittedly, by working out regularly, personal fitness or appearance can get better. The reason why some insist that places for exercise should be expanded is that . As as the number of what? increases, many people can get interests in exercising, and take easily do exercise at the near facilities. However, perilous diseases such as cancer cannot be prevented by exercising. For the reason, the quality of the public healthy the amount of decline for diseases or of sufferer might not be influenced, in general perspective.
Instead, many other measures can be applied to make people avoid mortal aliments. For example, most of cancer can be cured if they are discovered early, which is possible by periodically checking their condition. Many people are is likely to ignore the importance of the examination because of lack of time, and a great deal of money to check. For these reasons, many diseases which could be blocked in advance make people suffer suffering severely. If governments provide people with money and time for the detailed-examinations, people can easily have themselves keep healthy without serious illnesses. 심각한 질병에만 초점을 두기보다 public health의 전반적인 질에 초점이 가도록 설명해주세요. 운동보다 더 중요한 것이 정기적인 검진과 예방임을 설명하고 이를 통해 가벼운 병부터 심각한 질병까지도 예방이 가능하다는 점을 연결해서 설명하면 논리를 자연스럽게 풀어낼 수 있을 것으로 보입니다.
In conclusion, it is evident that people benefit from regular exercise, but however the limitation is also obvious. Rather than abstract aid, accurate policies can help people to be healthier in terms of diseases. Apart from the given way, there are innumerable innumerous ways for the public. Thus, the government should consider many directions and implement them.
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