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It is true that
nowadays there are some cities which accommodate not seniors but quite lots of
young people relatively. Some people think that it helps the local economy to
be more enhanced. However, other people claim that there are too many
disadvantages of coming together from all over the towns. 상황만을 제시하는 것이 아니라 본론에서 어떤 내용을 전개할 것인지 서론에서 소개해 주어야 합니다.
To begin with, there
are some people arguing that many young people bring about lots of benefits to
the local economy. This is because relatively those who aged around the 20s to
30s tend to spend much more money on enjoying their free time on weekends, which
results in more number of the construction of entertainment complex in their
community. Thus, with the active circulation of demand and supply, their local
economy can be much more developed.
On the other hand,
others claim that it can intensify competition of employment in some cities.
This is because many young people gather around an economic centre from all
over the country, which puts them on the severe problems of employment shortage.
Their bad situation makes individuals feel too much stress and then causes lots
of depression at the end. Moreover, unlike the cities which inhabit many young
people live in, the countryside experience has experienced lack of workforces for the last few
decades. As a result, it can cause the imbalance of economic development
nationally. Take the example of Korea. More and more young people have chosen
to go cities to work rather than countrysides. So, even if there are already lots of
big companies and job opportunities, many people are still struggling to find
their job every single day. 구직난과 관련된 사례이므로 구직난 설명 바로 뒷부분에 사례를 제시해주세요. 도시에 사람들이 몰리고 경제불균형이 초래된다는 내용은 취업난과는 별개의 내용입니다.
In conclusion, even
though overcrowded young people in some cities sometimes can cause the growth
of the local economy, I personally agree with the idea that this has more
drawbacks than benefits: contribution to the severe competition of employment
and the imbalance of regional development. |