Your Answer ▼ In recent times, more and more people are becoming unhealthy
with harmful eating habits such as consuming junk food. With this, there is a
belief that the government should put higher tax on junk food. However, I
disagree with this solution, thinking it is not an effective way.
Undeniably, there will be a downswing in popularity in junk
food if governments charge more taxes on having it. This is highly related to what
group of people enjoy those kinds of food. According to a recent research,
those who have low income and financial difficulty are more likely to have meals at a fast food restaurant which provides meals with a cheap reasonable price. By being
accustomed to eating it, their healthy issue such as obesity has been will be getting
worse and worse. To protect them from this it, increasing the prices costs by putting extra
taxes would be of great help as they will not be able to afford it for every
meal. However, the other health issues could be generated as they might be
suffered from insufficient nutrition. 이 내용은 다른 요지의 설명이므로 본론2에서 왜 반대하는지에 대해 풀어낼 때 적절한 부분을 찾아 넣어주는 편이 자연스러울 것 같아요.
Therefore, However, I do not agree with the idea and but claim that other
actions we should take to improve general unhealthy conditions that caused by
eating too much junk food. One of feasible actions is to educate individuals from
early stages. It is important to expose all the negative effects that fast food
has. This will be more helpful to make each member be aware of facts, so that
they will spontaneously be careful as they could assume what could really happen,
compared to forcing people not to eat without reasonable explanations. Especially
young generations need enough of disciplines as they have no ability to overcome the temptation of fast food since it is children-favorite based
taste. '왜' 정부가 세금을 매기는 것에 반대하는지에 대한 내용이 필요합니다. 현재 질문에서는 '패스트푸드 소비를 줄이려면 어떻게 해야 하는가?'를 물은 것이 아니기 때문에 어떤 방법이 있는지 소개하는 것은 논점에 맞지 않습니다.
In conclusion,
it is true that raising a rise on tax on junk food may cut down the number of fast food
restaurant customers, however, but there should be an excellent welfare with it as
the majority people of customers are financially poor. Thus, I oppose the opinion, saying education
will change its fundamental problem which is individuals’ perspective. |