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Some people think having a part-time job is
unsuitable for teenagers because they are too young to work and still only in
immature status. 아래 문장과 한 문단으로 합쳐주세요. But I think it has more benefits for them by several reasons.
To begin with, there are people who do not
agree that teenagers should not have jobs.works. They think teens are just in a preparatory
stage to go out into the society. They argue, for young people, other various experiences
such as Sstudying and doing sports are more imperative than working. Moreover, they express concern that there are many employers who do not provide a proper wage or work
environment for teens only because of their age. >여기까지 본론1로 묶고, However로 시작하는 문장부터는 반대 입장을 설명하는 내용이니 문단을 구분하고, 아래 내용들과 본론2로 묶어주세요. However, I think it is not
essential but it can become a good opportunity for teenagers to have a part-time
job. They develop their sense of responsibility through their work experience. place. Also, teens' teen’s part-time work is a great chance to cultivate their economic sense and
independence. In addition, the idea that it is a bad thing is wrong because
most teens work to get individual pocket money or experience, not luxury. In terms
of the unfair treatment, it can be prevented by protecting young workers in
law.>여기까지 본론2로 묶어주세요.
For these reasons, while it is apparent
that teenagers' having a part-time job for teenagers has some concerns and is considered unnecessary,
I firmly believe that it has more advantages in their growth and
self-improvement. |