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It is true that all
of the universities and colleges provide essential functions to their
undergraduates. Some people argue that the primary purpose of the university
and college is to provide teach not only education but also fellowship. However, other
people claim that universities should concentrate on giving practical knowledge related to career to their students.
On the one hand, there are some people arguing that universities have an essential function about teaching socialisation. To be more precise, by conversing with different people from other countries and towns in university or college, students can learn their unique culture and the way of thinking. As a result, they can develop their interpersonal skills and also broaden their outlook. For example, Hyojin, who is one of my best friends, is studying in New York. She once said that, while studying in a university abroad, she had experienced lots of valuable things. Primarily, according to her, the most meaningful experience was to socialise with new friends from other countries and to learn their foreign customs and lifestyle. With this, she could notice how socialisation is essential in our society. 현재 답안은 대학이 '무엇에 집중해야 한다'라는 식의 논조가 아니라 대학에 다니면 이러이러한 것이 가능하다, 하는 식의 논조에 가깝습니다. 질문 내용은 대학의 기능에 어떤 것이 있는지를 단순히 묻는 것이 아니라 대학 교육이 추구해야 하는 부분이 직업적인 측면에 있는지, 다른 부분에 있는지를 묻는다고 보는 것이 적절합니다. 대학에 다니면 좋은 점이 아니라 대학이 '무엇에 초점을 두고 무엇을 제공해야 하는지'에 대해 설명하는 입장으로 내용을 서술해주세요.
On the other hand,
other people claim that the most significant role of university or college is
to provide their students with more practical knowledge and technics needed in the workforce.
Nowadays, many students choose a university and a major for their future
career. Thus, the importance of practical education in the university or
college is increasing dramatically. Moreover, by providing work experiences in
advances such as internship and work placement, students can better adapt to
their work field in the future. '왜' 대학이 직업적으로 도움이 되는 지식을 제공해야 하는지에 대한 ground가 더 보완되어야 할 것 같아요. '학생들이 취업하려고 대학에 가니까'라는 설명은 근거로는 부족합니다. For instance, when I was a university student,
I took part in the internship programme which was provided by my college. With this experience, I could can have an opportunity to prove my capacity in the
workforce and it also helped me to find a more proper job when I graduated. 나의 입장도 본론에서 함께 밝혀주세요. 결론 문단은 글의 내용을 단순히 요약하는 기능만을 하기 때문에 새로운 정보를 넣을 수 없습니다.
In conclusion, both
views have their strong points. However, it seems that the latter view is more
convincing for two reasons: contribution to improving students capability and techniques before
getting work. |