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These days,
there is no doubt that traffic and pollution from transportation have become
huge problems. Governments try to solve these problems by increasing the cost
of petrol. I personally disagree with this statement and I will propose the additional
way to help to destroy those issues. 반대한다는 맥락이 어색합니다. 효과가 있다고 보기는 하지만 추가적인 조치가 필요하다고 생각한다, 추가적인 조치를 글에서 제시하겠다, 하는 식의 표현이 일관성 면에서 더 적절해 보입니다.
First
of all, fuel is key factor to control of traffic and air pollution in our society.
This It is a great idea to increase the petrol’s price. However, it will affect
other goods' good’s price such as food, clothes, and any other items which need to be delivered
to the shops. So it cannot be a the best way to control the pollution because it has a negative
effect on individuals' individual’s lives. 문단 분량을 더 보완해주세요. 어떤 면에서 효과적인지, 그런데 왜 이것만으로는 부족한지를 충분히 설명해주어야 합니다.
On the
other hand, we have other ways to control the pollution, such as reducing the price of public
transportation. This will encourage people to leave their cars at home and use
this cheap service. It does not have any bad effect on society and even make people
happy and satisfied with satisfaction about their governments. However, gGovernments can compensate compensation this different price by putting put more tax on cigars or other unhealthy
items which help to pose pollution. In addition, I mention about put some
limitation or ban on individual individual’s vehicles, which is very effective to control
traffic. For example, we should divide a week in two parts then advocate each
part to different efferent cars according to their numbers.
In conclusion,
I think that long-term traffic and pollution reductions would depend on
educating the public to use public transport more, and on governments using
public money to construct and run efficient systems. 결론은 본론 내용을 요약하는 문단입니다. 본론에 없는 내용은 결론에 들어갈 수 없습니다. |