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It is a common belief that city life is better than rural life for children's growth. However, I firmly believe that rural life is better than city life because the countryside is cleaner than the city and children can learn a sense of community. I will further outline my argument below. To begin with, the countryside is a safer and cleaner place for children to grow up than the city. When children live in a rural area, they can enjoy outdoor activities with less pollution because of fewer cars and fewer factories. For example, a research conducted by the Korea Environment corporation has shown that the difference in volume of fine dust between cities and countryside is enormous. The amount of city area's fine dust is much higher than the amount of rural area's fine dust. (질문1: 같은 내용이긴 한데 예시를 앞에처럼 쓰는 거랑 이것 중에 뭐가 더 나을까요?? For example, research conducted on the difference in volume of fine dust between cities and countryside has shown that the amount of fine dust in city areas is much higher than the amount of fine dust in the countryside.) (질문2: fine dust in the countryside 랑 countryside's fine dust 중에 뭐가 더 맞는 건가요??) This study offers strong proof that countryside is a much cleaner place for children to grow up. On top of that, children can learn a sense of community when they live in the countryside. This is because people who live in the countryside are usually friendly with neighbors and share things about their daily lives. For instance, I spent holidays with neighbors when I lived in the rural area. By spending a lot of times with my neighbors, I learn how to cooperate with others and get along with other people. As the example illustrates, I believe that the rural area is a good place to teach children a sense of community. For these reasons, it is clear that raising children in the countryside is better than bringing up children in the urban area. (질문3: 제가 6.0을 받아야하는데 전치사나 관사에서 실수가 종종 있는데 전치사와 관사과 점수에 영향을 크게 미치나요?? ㅠㅠ) |