Undoubtedly, friends and teachers play a significant role in students’ daily lives where they study and play.(맨 처음 시작 문장이 굉장히 중요한데 괜찮은 편입니다. 관심을 끌어당깁니다) Whether teachers have more powerful impacts than peers or not is a contentious issue. However, I agree with the opinion that students get more influences by their teachers than by friends for the following reasons. To begin with, in terms of emotional growth, students are able to depend on their teachers rather than peers. This is because teachers have a lot of experiences with their students who have various issues such as relationships and self-esteem.(그냥 experience라고 하면 해석이 불가능 합니다. 예를 들어 dealt with라고 하거나 봐왔다 라는 뜻으로 말한건가요?)Therefore, they can give students proper advices based on their previous real cases, and it helps which will help studentsfeel safe and reliable.(feel reliable은 무슨 뜻인가요?) This emotional support ends up have a positive effect on emotional stability and trustworthy. Also, considering teachers’ professionalism, teachers are the best person to show the effective way for improve students’ academic achievement. The reason is why they spend their own time and energy to develop better educational methodologies and create a qualified curriculum for their student.(무슨 뜻인가요) According to the study conducted by Harvard university, the students who studied studying with teachers got 20% higher scores in a math exam compared to the others studying other students who studied with their peers in the same period. All things considered, I believe that the importance of teachers far outweigh those of peers in student’s growth in both an academic aspect and an emotional aspect for the reasons I have mentioned above. |