A Rapid development of the social network technology has been bringing a lot of advantages to our daily life. The internet service is the most well-known example. Unlike the past, we can easily meet various new people whenever and wherever we want through the internet. There is also a negative point of views as well. However, in my opinion, the Internet has more benefits in forming a new relationship with people than drawbacks.(more이 있다면 반드시 뒤에 than이 있어야합니다!!!) With the advancement of technology of social network service, people do not have to go outside to socialize with their friends or meet new people. Although it could be a huge advantage for people who are afraid to meet of meeting people face to face, it is also available to make normal people have a difficulty to socialize with people in real world.(??무슨 뜻이죠) For example, plenty of teenagers are obsessed with playing to play a computer game and do social network application such as Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter. Since adolescence is the time when their values are formed.(덜 끝난 문장입니다. 콤마찍고 다른 문장 다시 나와야합니다. 그리고 무슨 value에 대해 이야기 중인건가요??) Due to the internet, they can turn into improper characteristics.(무슨 의미인가요??) However, to be more general, the strides in the technology of communication have been more positive than negative on keeping and making the relationship. Not only the Internet has been improving, but also transportation also been developing. It means when we are away from home, keeping touch with our friends and family.(transportation이 develop했다는 건 너무 디테일에 쓸모없는 정보였습니다. 그냥 여행 갔을때 라고 말하면 더 해석 편합니다) With improved internet technology, people are able to keep in touch with their peers even when they are travelling. For example, in the past, the students who are studying in abroad struggled to communicate with their family. However, for now, there is no difficulty to talk with in talking to them during their trip thanks to because of the Internet. In addition, the Internet service let people enable to meet diverse people who are living in different countries. This global activity makes people broaden their perspective to adapt to Global village. To sum up, it is obvious that there is a few disadvantage continuous using the Internet to meet people.(???) However, I believe the advantage is much bigger and it makes our life more convenient. |