◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- 수정 사항 없습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- This is because there are many reasons for this
-> There are many reasons why Mr Kim was my favorite teacher.
- when I was in trouble, he's always there for me and willing to help
-> whenever I was in trouble, he was always there for me and was willing to help
- for the reasons I have mentioned above (에세이 문장입니다)
-> for the reason I have mentioned earlier
-> 이유 하나만 이야기하셔서 reason이라고 해주세요.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 33초부터 나오는 All things considered ~ 마무리 문장은 빼주시는 것이 더 좋습니다. 이유 하나를 더 제시하시고 설명해주세요.
◆ Comments
- 이유 두 개를 제시하고 설명해주시는 것이 좋습니다.
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