- photography 발음이 매우 부정확합니다. [ph] 발음에 더 신경써주세요.
- place, plan에서 [l] 발음이 약합니다.
- reason 발음이 부정확합니다. [r] 발음을 정확하게 해주세요.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
The man disagrees with the student's opinions to start permitting photography majors to exhibit their photographs in the campus dining hall.
There are two reasons why he thinks this way.
The first, the place is so crowed, and it makes noises.
He says that it is difficult to admire the photographs, because people would talk loudly with each other.
The second reason is that the exhibiting photographs could be damaged by people. (조금 어색한 표현입니다)
He says that people temps (해석이 안되는 어색한 문장입니다) to touch by their dirty hands, so it is careless to protect photographs.
For these reasons, he doesn’t think that the plan is a good idea.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 전체적인 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다.
- 이해가 잘 가지 않는 부분들이 있습니다. 조금 더 매끄러운 설명이 될 수 있도록 노력해주세요. 의미 전달을 확실하게 해주셔야 합니다.
◆ Comments
- 발음, 특히 [r], [l] 그리고 [ph], [f] 발음에 더 신경써주세요.
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