◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- shakespeare: 현재 shakesfear로 발음하고 있습니다. p 발음을 정확히 해주세요.
- soultions: 발음을 정확하게 해주세요.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- The woman has a trouble with
-> The woman is having trouble with
trouble은 단수형으로 쓰지 않습니다
- although she will have some tight deadline she can just do other classes coursework in advance
-> although she will have a tight deadline she can do other classes coursework in the meantime
- also, if she buy the book~
-> also, if she buys the book~
- it's just not worth it, and she don't even have enough budget
-> it would be a waste of money.
"it's just not worth it"은 너무 애매합니다.
"and she don't even have enough budget": since she has a tight budget
passage에서 budget 얘기가 나왔는지 모르겠지만 안나왔다면, 예산을 뜻하는 budget보다 money를 쓰시는게 적합합니다.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 첫번째 이유는 적합하였으나 두번째 이유가 논리적이지 못했습니다.
◆ Comments
- 상황 설명을 조금 더 간단히 해주세요.
- just라는 말을 많이 쓰셨는데 informal한 표현이니 자제해주시길 바랍니다.
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