◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- traffic jam 에서 f발음을 정확하게 해주세요.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- I can take online courses anytime and anywhere that i want to do
-> I can take online courses anytime and anywhere that i want
- I have to pay a lot of money to transportation fee
-> I have to spend a lot of money on transportation
- even when I'm late I have to take taxi which cost more than I expected
-> Especially when I'm late, I have to take a taxi which can cost more than what I expected
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 이유 설명이 더 필요합니다. 예를 들어 traffic jam 부분에서 because it takes me one hour to get to school by bus등의 추가 설명이 필요합니다.
- 현재 교통이유만으로 설명하고 있습니다, 다른 이유를 제시해주세요.
◆ Comments
- 이유 설명을 더 논리적으로 해주시길 바랍니다.
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