Describe the characteristics of a good parent. Use details and examples to support your opinion.
In my opinion, the characteristics of a good parent are being patient and giving a wise advice. There are two reasons why I think that. First, parents need to be patient when their children are young. To be specific, young children sometimes don’t listen to parents and it’s easy to get angry at their children. But parents should be in control of them. Secondly, giving a wise advice is also needed to parents. Specifically, children are too young to make important decisions. They need to get advice from their parent. For these reasons, the characteristics of a good parent are being patient and giving a wise advice.
채점기준 | 점수 | 첨삭 |
Fluency | 2 | - parents,secondly 틀린 발음 정정하여 주세요. |
Grammar | 3 | 수정할 사항은 없습니다. |
Contents & Ideas | 3 |
- 처음 시작 하실 때에 in이 들리지 않고, my opinion부터 들립니다. 리코딩 시작타임을 잘보셔야 합니다. - neeeded to, specifically 끊어져 읽는듯한 느낌이 강합니다. - 아래와 마찬 가지로 why I think that 을 why I think/fee this way 로 수정하여 주세요. |
Perfection | 3 | 설명하는 과정에서 선택하신 thesis에 관련한 wise/patience등을 예시에서 반드시 재진술해주셔야 합니다. |
Score | 16-19 | Pronunciation and accent issue |