1번 : which of these activities do you like to do by yourself rather than with other people : 1) watching movie; 2) shopping; 3) eating?
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- it won't necessarily make lecture interesting
-> it won't necessarily make lectures interesting
- schools should consider the contents more itself not in the equipments
-> schools should focus more on the contents and not on the equipment
- it will cause financial problem
-> it will cause financial problems
- as a result, school has to
-> as a result, the school has to
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