Q1.
It made me have a precious experience of meeting people. à It allowed me to ~~~ 로 변경 하세요.
It also helped me refresh stress from studying and it very helped, it helped a lot to develop my health, physical strength. à It also helped me relieve stress from studying. It also helped me improve my health. (20-23 / 2.66 – 3.00)
Feedback: 끝맺음 하는 부분이 없는 것이 아쉽고 문법적인 오류가 몇 가지 있네요. 그리고 좀 더 자연스럽게 문장이 나올 수 있도록 노력이 필요합니다. 수고하셨어요.
Q2.
…some people may prefer to may choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. à
…some people may prefer not to have any plans in their free time.
…it is better to plan activities for my free time. à …… in my free time.
…. I had many, a lot of free time… à many 생략.
….I just tried to plan it and have been successful to use time efficiently. à I tried to make plans and I could manage my time more efficiently. (20-23 / 2.66 – 3.00)
Feedback: 처음 시작은 activities 하는 것이 좋다 였는데 마지막 끝맺음은 요새 바빠서 시간 낭비 하고 싶지 않다 네요. 그 앞 문장은 지난 여름에 시간이 많아서 어쩌고 했는데 내용 전개가 맞지 않습니다. 문법적 오류에도 주의 하시구요. 수고하셨습니다.