◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- "If" 발음 끝에 's' 발음을 더하셔서 'ifs'로 들릴 때가 있습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- universities should permit the eating of snacks in class
-> universities should allow students to eat snacks in class
- students who have class in early times, they don't really have enough time to have their breakfast
-> students who have early classes in the morning don't have enough time to eat breakfast
- but ifs university permits students to eat snacks in class
-> but if universities allow students to eat snacks in class
- students can get very frustrated if the class is too strict
-> students can get very frustrated if the classroom atmosphere is too tense
- However, if they can have some snack during the class, they feel more comfortable
-> However, if they are allowed to eat snacks during class, they could feel more comfortable
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 제시하신 이유가 모두 적절하고 설명이 잘 되어있습니다.
- 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다.
◆ Comments
- 전체적으로 흐름이 매우 좋습니다. 발음과 인토네이션도 좋으세요.
- 그러나 어색한 표현들이 조금 있습니다. 문법적으로 틀린 부분들은 없지만 표현 자체가 어색한 부분들이 있어요, 위 첨삭 내용을 참고해주세요.
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