◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- original 에서 [o] 부분 발음을 정확하게 해주세요. 현재 regional로 들리고 있습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- the man is facing the problem that
→ the man is faced with a problem where
- he forgot to bring his suit at his parents' house
→ 어색합니다. he forgot to bring his suit which is at his parents' house
→ he forgot to bring his suit from his parents' house
- I think make a good first impression
→ I think making a good first impression
- in the job interview
→ at the job interview
- or he considered interview is not important
→ or he (interviewer) could think that he (interviewee = the man) did not consider the interview as an important event
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 전체적인 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다.
- 뒷 부분에서 갑자기 bicycle 이야기가 나와 조금 뜬금없게 느껴집니다. 충분히 상황을 설명해주시면 좋겠습니다. Although he mentioned that he needs money for a new bicycle .... 이런식으로 언급을 해주시는 것이 좋습니다.
- 나머지 부분은 설명을 굉장히 잘 해주신 것 같습니다.
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